I read these and then play with the original text to see how my creation would dance with what X.P. writes. it's a fun game, you know, like playing Connections or World. 😉
I, too, am playing the game. Wondering if there are enough words for it to fit into my "three times sourced" erasure project, where I'm erasing the same work three times, leaving different words (with none overlapping) each time. This one is so rich. And should be fun.
I read these and then play with the original text to see how my creation would dance with what X.P. writes. it's a fun game, you know, like playing Connections or World. 😉
Would love to see what you do/have done.
I, too, am playing the game. Wondering if there are enough words for it to fit into my "three times sourced" erasure project, where I'm erasing the same work three times, leaving different words (with none overlapping) each time. This one is so rich. And should be fun.
Curious to see what might come out of this one for you and your 3x erasures.
I will definitely share
Thanks X.P! I too jumped into the game and came up with this erasure:
stupid
terrible
rather
imperfect
I face
myself
angry
& bright
Ha ha ha! I love it. Thanks for sharing.
Wonderful erasure poem. And I so love seeing the original poem. Your spare poem captures so much of the spirit of the original.
I had to play too! I am approximating spacing.
Love me
when I am
blue
swallowing
hunger
angry mule
hard
small
It erased all the spacing when I posted. Oh well.
Yeah, we don't have much spacing control in the comments. But your erasure still works. Love it!
I really love this art form and you have a gift for unveiling such rich and surprising subtexts from the source, X.P.!
Thanks, Angela.
This is so rich and I love seeing the original and they speak to each other.
Thanks, LeeAnn.
An interesting and valid condensation of the original (which is an interesting poem already). An exercise in minimalism?
In this case, yes, you could say so.
Stupid terrible imperfect love.
I am blue yet my heart is hopeful.
Oooo...this is fun. Kim Nelson I should not have read your post. LOL
Wonderful! I'm so glad you did.
Thank you!
New here and I jumped in too (also w/approximate spacing):
We both
Love
rather a
monsoon
I
swallow my
heart
hard
Thanks! I love this and love that you jumped right in.
from the other side
of some hill:
.
I am
mountain,
I am
swallowing
a small
sun
.
:-)
Slow clap, standing.
Awwww cheers! Really enjoyed it. Great way to start the day. :-)