I love this, Patty. This is particularly wonderful:
his trouser crease a shark’s fin disquieting
my cool lagoon, the click of his heels on tile
the tick-tick-tick-tick of a bomb counting down.
What perfect and ominous metaphors! I like "talky" poems as much I like concise poems (I also love Emily Dickinson and Walt Whitman). It's fun to experience your range. And I too appreciate the notes!
well this is fabulous! And the 'notes' an extra bonus!!
I have a painting entitled “Golden Boy, Blackhearted Bastard”. I’ll show you sometime. It goes so well with today’s poem.
Ha! Too bad I didn’t know. This could have been an ekphrastic poem.
I love this, Patty. This is particularly wonderful:
his trouser crease a shark’s fin disquieting
my cool lagoon, the click of his heels on tile
the tick-tick-tick-tick of a bomb counting down.
What perfect and ominous metaphors! I like "talky" poems as much I like concise poems (I also love Emily Dickinson and Walt Whitman). It's fun to experience your range. And I too appreciate the notes!